You could make your point a lot more constructively if you omitted the denigration of the author’s substantial effort and people who suffer genuine manic episodes (which tend not to be this pretty).
It might come off as an attack on the author, but to me it's a succinct description. To the author, maybe it will be constructive criticism (if they are even reading). In general, people who set out to create something grand or complex fall short. Successful complex projects I've seen have all started off simple and grown complex slowly out of necessity.
