Saying "I changed and grew" is not the same as the narrator changing and growing. You just agreed with everything I said: "he just says what he has to say."
That is engaging and persuasive for almost no one.
Moreover, him saying "I changed" comes late in the essay. It's too late to establish either credibility or sympathy.
No wonder the high school kids reject some random adult with boring, bald statement sentences telling them how they're all wrong.
> That is engaging and persuasive for almost no one.
It's engaging and persuasive for those of us who just want to grasp the underlying ideas. Maybe not so much for people who need all the rhetorical grease I was talking about earlier.
That is engaging and persuasive for almost no one.
Moreover, him saying "I changed" comes late in the essay. It's too late to establish either credibility or sympathy.
No wonder the high school kids reject some random adult with boring, bald statement sentences telling them how they're all wrong.